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Dancing Fingers

Fingers Dancing,
Like maidens in dresses waltzing.
Music, music,
Intertwining with your soul.
Softly now, decrescendo.
Like magic, the notes emerge,
Each one holding a piece
Of a puzzle that
Slowly, slowly
Becomes a part of you.
Don't stop.
How will it end?
Symphonies and melodies,
Sounds of love,
Sounds of a DREAM.
With every key these fingers strike
More dreams are formed.
Suddenly,
CRESCENDO!
Something's happening!
This dream is turning into
A nightmare!
Surprise!
New stories are being told.
That's what music is:

A story to be told.

Author notes

LALALALALALALA, im a singer, LALALALALALALA, and a piano player, LALALALALALALA, and a guitar player, LALALALALALALA, and a flute player, LALALALALALALA, and ANYTHING ELSE YOU CAN POSSIBLY IMAGINE =P just kidding, i just love music and i wrote this during my piano lesson, well after i finished and was waiting for my parents to pick me up =P... so yeah... tell me the truth k?!?! =DDD BYE!!! ♥

Hey! So umm... what do you think?!?! =P

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Terry-too silver member
    February 3

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    Just so

    To anyone who loves music (I write with Glenn Gould's piano on earphones) this makes perfect sense.
    I read it a second time because I love music too.

    If you revise, do you plan to add punctuation?
    Not saying you must, because a lot of people write this way, but if you want to draw attention to something, end-punctuation can help emphasize it merely by pausing on an end-word. (You do have some.)
    I too was taught to put a traditional capital to begin every line, since it was required of poetry.
    Times have changed, and since endline punctuation --which also was traditionally required-- has gone, why do you need beginning capitals when they add no meaning?

    There again meaning is lost. A capital where a sentence begins in midline or anywhere it makes sense to start a new sentence, is worth trying.

    All my best,
    Terry




    • Manoura xx
      February 6
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      Hi Terry,
      I just read this poem over and decided to add periods, I think your right, it actually does make a difference. (I will go and revise right now).
      Thanks for the help,
      Manoura


      • Terry-too silver member
        February 7
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        It does indeed.

        Gives the reader an excuse to pause and consider the full meaning.
        Thank you for telling me this.

        Terry


  • Beautiful-Mourning
    December 9, 2008
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    Such a beautiful write.
    Music just takes you away to another world


    QOD

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