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pink

the crooning of pyramids
& unseen deserts
sift over my body
like an oasis.

i drift out to sea on a raft
with my sitar,

the heat diffuses through
my fingers and toes
under the waves


i am gentle as a strawberry
unlock my breasts,
(there's a harp made of heartstrings)


our salty hands will
mould songs out of tears,
& I'll dream of islands
in the shape of my forehead.

Author notes

LadyAmalthea

Mmm wrote this after dancing to Feist & Devendra Banhart.
I was very relaxed...feeling kind of middle eastern haha =P.
Also from listening to Duke Ellington, i love the exotic songs he made.

♥

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  • chilali
    January 2
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    Gorgeous! I loved the imagery! Definitely one of my favorites by you! Bookmarked


  • Ryno
    November 14, 2008

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    Bahhhhh. Your imagery is just so gripping, it works in harmony with your poetic device to just keep me fully interested...

    ...and, eventually, dropping my jaw with the emotions/intensity you are able to portray.

    Again, a great piece.


  • girl shaman
    October 22, 2008

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    very sweet
    i love the line where you say you are like a gentle strawberry. it kind of leaves a sweet taste in my mouth because i just feel a gentle strawberry would be the sweetest! sorry i didnt get to this sooner hun! i love your writing


  • Miss Faith
    October 22, 2008
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    ooooh, I like it


  • the atlantic
    October 21, 2008
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    stunning.


  • acoustical
    October 21, 2008

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    i am gentle as a strawberry
    unlock my breasts,
    (there's a harp made of heartstrings)


    sooo sensuous and gorgeous.
    like you!
    i LOVE feist. been singing her all day.


    • LadyAmalthea
      October 21, 2008
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      =D
      Thank you so much!!
      ♥
      woo power to Feist ^-^
      Honey Honey is my favorite song i think...

      <33luvya


  • bird-mad girl
    October 21, 2008

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    "i am gentle as a strawberry
    unlock my breasts,
    (there's a harp made of heartstrings)"

    That was a gorgeous stanza. It was so juicy and beautiful.

    Your imagery was grand. It was so elegant and refreshing. I honestly feel like I'm breathing lighter now, as if my lungs are abosrbing all there is to breath and feel.

    There was something sensual about your piece... I don't know if it's because that one stanza is so natural and still rattling through my mind or if it's the whole piece.


    • LadyAmalthea
      October 21, 2008
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      c= thank you so much for the comment!! I'm so happy you feel life in this<3
      I was definately going for like..a very intimate kind of feeling with it. ♥ Thanks so much!

  • bird-mad girl
    October 21, 2008
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    hey could you read the rules one more time? thanks!

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