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Halloween Candy Haunts

I open the door and what do I see.
Its a little goblin who grabs a handful of candy.
He then runs away as a witch comes near
Getting some candy then going to disappear.
A baby teletubby so cute and chubby
so i give him a bunch of candy made of honey
He smiles up  at me and hugs my hand
and his mother zombie carries him away hand in hand
All the happy giggles and cheers
they've come through all the years
but this little Fairy who is me
likes to sit down and watch them flee
from house to house
in and out
candy and creatures are all about!
Happy Halloween Allpoetry!!!!!

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  • Tammy Knott Greeters member
    November 21, 2008

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    Very cute. This is very sweet and what Halloween should be.


    Thank you for entering. Good luck in the contest and thank you for following the rules.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment



    Happy Halloween and God Bless
    Tammy


    • we-are-already-dead
      December 11, 2008
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      Thanks, you keep penning and writing and making amazing contests of which I will gladly enter if I may.
      Sunny


  • Dark Otter
    October 29, 2008

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    Yes, I do

    This is the true spirit of halloween. Its about the kids, having fun and pretending. You have created some very happy visuals that reflect well the heart of the holiday. Your first 4 lines are a strong opening.


    • we-are-already-dead
      October 29, 2008
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      Thanks you Otter for your comment reflects the exact visual I was striving to exceed and You so strongly enjoying my poem thrills me more then you can imagine. It is always in my best interest to get new readers of who I am proud to receive there compliments and tips.


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    October 21, 2008

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    Haha, this is so cute! I especially loved the bit about the teletubby, since my little cousin dressed up as one for halloween when he was, like, 3, and it was adorable!

    This line started off great:

    "and his mother zombie takes him like a handful of sand".

    The only thing was, the second bit didn't quite make sense. Shame, since the rest was so sweet... no pun intended

    Good luck in the contest!

    Laura


    • we-are-already-dead
      October 21, 2008
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      no pun intended huh??? lol im glad you liked it and i just might change that bit about the mummy a little. I bet i could make it better.
      THANK YOU FOR THE COMMENT HUN!!!!!!!!!!!
      love you frome sunny

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