Mesmerizing visions, Picture-perfect skies;
taking place as the sun merges with the horizon
Watching lovers, bringing them closer together
Author notes
Prompt: Sunset
A contest entry
- 20/20 [prompt inspired QUICKIE♥ by etoile.
525 points, ended October 27, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - CELEBRATING POETRY AND POETS- ONE-DAY competition, "PREVIOUSLY WRITTEN" WORK ONLY by Vera Rich.
6000 points, ended November 26, 2008, 127 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 11 of 11
-
Beautiful imagery! Well done love. I really enjoyed reading this
Much love
Ylova
-
Sorry. You seem to have misread the rules of my "Celebrating poetry and poets" competition. For this piece does not seem to refer to either. I wish you luck with it elsewhere - but for this particular competition, it has to rank as a "non-starter".
-
good take on the prompt. I liked where you went with this, it was very creative. the imagery is also very beautiful. I like the second line a lot.
thanks for entering and goodluck
-
beautiful, short sweet and powerful
-
Beautiful lines here..
All the best!
-
i like it
my comment is going to be twenty words too haha
this is kinda short no?
bye bye
xxxxxx
-
-
You are so weird, but in a good way.
And instead of bye bye you could have said loooove you!
*Hmph*
Only kidding.
Thanks for the comment.
xxx
<3
-
-
I came on this poemlet by chance by clicking on the "Random" button. It is evocative, but I have to say that I find the grammatical ambiguities distracting. For example, I am perplexed by "picture perfect skies". Do you mean that the skies are perfect as pictures (in which case, perhaps you should write "picture-perfect" with a hyphen) or is it an instruction to the reader to form a mental picture of perfect skies (in which case a colon might help ("picture: perfect skies"). I fully appreciate that there is a place in poetry for deliberate ambiguities and enigmas, but in a piece like this which is a brief evocation of beauty, being obliged to stop and puzzle over meaning means I lose much of the mood.
-
-
Hmm it was meant to be like the skies are perfect as pictures, so yeah I should put a hyphen there. I know this isn't a very good piece as my poetry isn't usually like this. Sorry if it confused you.
-
-
This is possible the shortest thing you've ever written but it fits amazingly with the prompt. You used good words they provoke images.
Great write dearest!!
-
-
Had to be 20 words.
I'm really disappointed with it to be honest. :/
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 11 of 11
