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Freckles

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His fingertips wanted to drool over her;
to bathe her freckles in saliva kisses
and then tickle them dry.

It was almost only yesterday
that she was yearning for
a warm body;

one that will fuck her on a table top
and delight in her sighs,
and one that will hold her tenderly
without yenning to move on.

His arm rested under the arch of her back
and the other caressed all of her senses,
as if they all were grand keys,
and a perfect harmony could be made
by stroking them.

She implored her eyes weren’t liars
as the sensations in every ounce
of herself sat on the brink

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    January 2

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    Nice!

    Let it go, let it flow, I see you light up romeo, you have skill, your weavings bring thrills, as a chill shivers down my spine, this write is divine. Bravo!


    Much love and light, Timothy


  • Rock-Junkie
    November 24, 2008

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    breathtaking!

    thats all I can say... sensual indeed.
    great job on the prompt
    good luck!!


  • Tony El Great silver member
    November 12, 2008

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    Wow, enjoyed the write; hot, hot, hot!


    • silverscent gold member
      November 23, 2008

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      Thanks for the comment, it's much appreciated

      • Tony El Great silver member
        November 23, 2008
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        Wow, and I just thought "Yen" was Chinese money; so I suppose one could say that one can yen for some yen. (LOL)

        • silverscent gold member
          November 23, 2008
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          Lol it means the same as yearning, but I figured I'd already used that word in the poem...don't want any unnecessary repetition do I?


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 31, 2008

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    Humm..it is really a wonderful in taste and in its message along its tipic..I love its pace and rythem of the words..well done...


  • Rock-Junkie
    October 27, 2008
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    all right Im ready

    the word shall be....
    [brink]

    have fun!

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