To my family, friends , lovers , and all I left broken hearted:
This was by far the hardest decision I had come too
if you are reading this now I will already be on my journey back home
You see life isn't all it was cracked up to be
I have been hurt so many times
and spent most of my hours in grief
(when I should have been happy)
Times have changed and I have changed
we all have to adapt to those changes
and that was just something I couldn't do
(adapt)
education was my pride but where is it now?
(gone)
writing was my passion but where has it gotten me?
(nowhere)
love was mending my broken heart but what happend next?
(I hurt her like I promised I wouldn't)
Life is full of broken promises
so as I make my final descent here
from this place I used to call home
Im sure the scene will be gruesome
My face imbeded into the concrete
my teeth out of my skull
laying in a pool of blood
but I swear to you
it was none of your faults at all
(it was mine)
suicide is painless
but you see this earth brought enough pain to bear
so I am sorry I had to leave you
with this goodbye
and the silence and grief to follow in this October air
Burry me in a black casket
red roses all around
dont cry for you are sad
forget the tears
I like this new place im at now
cry for I am now happy
free from all burdens from earth
remember me when you say your prayers
its not a funeral its my rebirth
gather around my grave
forget me if you like
Its now ashes and ashes and dust to dust
from this point on
until we meet on the other side
I love you all and I will miss you
when you smile remember me so
I had my story here all along to tell you
begging to end and inbetween it flows
Goodbye family, friends, and lovers
My time on earth has been great
I just wanted to leave you one final note
so I can be at peace in my grave.
God bless you all and your families
its not goodbye its till we meet again.
sincerly another hopeless victim
to society's morals and trends.
Author notes
options A and C combined.
In a list
A contest entry
- If you were to die by Starz of Heaven.
625 points, ended October 25, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please give me your honest opinion on what you truly think of this piece I will return the favor...*muah* (redhanded)
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What a sad write. If I knew a place where this could be shared i would so encourage you to share it. I loves you
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Wow this was an intense poem there is a few lines that were full of images that were very grim but non the less it is a great write thanks for your entry be well
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thankyou for taking the time out to read my write and taking the time to speak kind words. best of luck to you in the future and with your writing as well.
andi
(redhanded)
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I liked this, it was different in a way. But still full of emotion. The only part I really didn't like was:
My face imbeded into the concrete
my teeth out of my skull
laying in a pool of blood
It was a little bit blunt for me really.
But that's just my opinion, I bet some people will think it fits in well with this. I thought that it was well written and I really really loved the ending, definietely my favourite part. You did a good job with this.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Take care
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thank you very much for your kind words. and I tend to be blunt with alot of things sorry lol, but thank you again and best of luck to you in the future and with your writing as well.
andi
(redhanded)
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