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redemption

I remember when
cigarette burns
were the new finish

leather seats
and white walls

bottled courage
names in stone

 

became red faces

concrete kisses
and
scrap metal scars

 

 

A contest entry

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  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    October 29, 2008
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    I likes it.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 24, 2008

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    I remember those times too... I have a very interesting story about cigarette burns on leather seats actually lol

    This is a very interesting take on the prompt that I really enjoyed!!


  • Cannonsfire
    October 22, 2008

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    Leather tends to melt when burned and it smells goddamn awful too...had me plenty of concrete kisses and still have the scars. C


  • PerfectImperfection
    October 21, 2008

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    Nice use of imagery to allow a certain glimpse of revelry to reign. Thoughtful take on the prompted piece itself, allowing more angst to shine, at least for me. Well penned! Best wishes in the contest!


  • Floorboards
    October 21, 2008
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    Hehehe, superb images old boy, well done indeed, great last line,

    Alex.


  • Deathless1
    October 21, 2008
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    i don't remember a hole lot.
    but it's all good.

    nice imagery


  • DolceVito gold member
    October 21, 2008

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    I, too...

    ...remeber...real leather seats that would not burn as easily as the crap they make nowadays

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