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Of Cabbages and Kings

cabbages,
carefully lifted
by the farmer
next the fountain;
haunted
by the horrifying,
quaint but qualified,
remorsefully rigid
ghost.






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  • montez gold member
    January 2, 2009
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    Sorry goosefeatures but....

    .....having decided to read one of your freeverse efforts to see if I really AM missing anything ; I now wish I hadn't!
    Perhaps you, as a friend, can explain to me the merit in writing something which not only the reader doesn't understand, but nor does the author?
    Confused.com.


    • quantumsurveyor
      January 2, 2009
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      But.....don't you see the brilliant cleverness in my use of the contest wordbank???

      You didn't, sad but it must be your age. Go chew some nougat from Montelimar.

      Your quackless friend, Donald.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    a remorsefully rigid ghost - I WANT to see that.

    Very cleverly done with class and brevity.

    Thank you. A delight and a pleasure. Thank you for a fine entry and splendid use of the word bank. ~Pamela

  • piccola
    October 22, 2008

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    haha! we're in the same contest. I like the way you've done yours but I like mine better (reaches out hand) Well wishes in the contest.

  • Judith Chandler
    October 21, 2008

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    I love the idea of a qualified ghost. That gave me a chuckle but ghosts surely must be qualified to do what they do, and perhaps farmers are more easily haunted than it would seem.

    Great write, very succinct.


  • arafura
    October 21, 2008
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    Good work mate!

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