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A Good Seed

You stand splendidly as a tree
Odds you defy, face them with glee,
Brother you’re a man with value
Mother sowed a good seed in you.

You bring joy to our family
We hold you in our hearts dearly,
Brother you help us lose our rue
Mother sowed a good seed in you.

You’re a gentleman to ladies
Respect you give without malice,
Brother to you they’ll say ‘I do’
Mother sowed a good seed in you.

You stand splendidly as a tree
Mother sowed a good seed in you.

Author notes

for my brother...

A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet). Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be: AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.


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  • Denerica silver member
    December 25, 2008
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    Compassionate dedication to your brother. Nice write.


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    December 25, 2008

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    Lovely!

    This is the first of it's type I've read! As I'm an inspired writer I always am amazed at how those who craft poems can follow a form [format] and do it so well! Sounds like you've got a nice brother there to inspire you.
    Trust this'll do well in the Contest.


  • Crazy9Piano8Freak
    November 8, 2008

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    Very good write! after I read the author's notes, it made more sense as to the type of poem it is written as. Wonderful job. Thank you and good luck!!
    ~Koko~


  • dustytiger
    November 4, 2008

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    this is very well written, and very powerful, i really like the style of poem you used here, it's really powerful


  • Amera gold member
    October 26, 2008

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    I love the Kyrielle Sonnet and this is really a good one. The refrain is perfect and carries the poem well.

    Love,
    Amera

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