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nothing.

[outside and alone]
the air has a bitter cold taste to it
i'm sure it's warm where you are

                          "because my heart aches for you"
even when it shouldn't
cigarette kisses i long gave up
                          come back to haunt me.
when i'm driving home

[giving in to a habit that died long ago]

  what have we become?

growing up states and miles apart.

picking up the pieces we shattered. leaving each other with half.
"sugar. someday we'll get married and we'll be happy"



oh heartbreaker.
                            these winter days make me wish it was
sorta kinda true

that someday we'd be in that
"forever kind of love"
i.would.trust.you.
you would [love me best]

and i know that you're my forever
                                                            even if i was
                                                                            never
                                                          ever
                                                                      yours.

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  • Curtkf
    November 19, 2008

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    Thought Provoking

    Wild Form, and, as always, entertaining to say the least. I really like the line "picking up the pieces the pieces we shattered", cause its almost never just one that hurts a relationship. Good to see that you're still writing them as deeply and with as much thought as always. Keep the good ones coming.

  • overdue criticism
    October 22, 2008

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    awesome.

    idk if you meant to do it or not, but the way the words and verse fragments are moved around is really cool. i really really liked it.