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horizon

receding glow darkens
   
    barren womb of day

throws up thousand Suns in night

    all tiny twinklings

ages past holds sky

Author notes

- surreal
- sunset

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  • Kiddy
    October 29, 2008

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    Skyward! ' Twinklings ages past' - you have brought in the science of million years old in a small line. One of your best.
    Love
    -Kiddy


  • etoile
    October 27, 2008

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    I really like your take on both of the prompts. the third line really stood out to me. the imagery was amazing and the way you wrote was simply beautiful. great write.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • crimsondew
    October 21, 2008
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    Love this write up on night sky... Beautiful imagery here!
    All the very best in the contest!


  • Sandal
    October 21, 2008

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    This gives me a sad feeling, like the illusions of the day have passed and all is revealed as vain and ephemeral. "barren womb of day" and "ages past" add to it. Beautiful images, best of luck!


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Wow - this is stunningly beautiful. I stumbled across this and am thoroughly impressed. Exquisite!

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