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Bedewing Love

Silky rains
 of your dark cloud moisture
give growth
   to thick root.


Aspiring toward your heavens.


My goddess,
reign down upon me.
 
Cultivate succulence

  from the secret garden

 of these earthly delights.

 

Let us satiate nature's need

            endulging of spilled seed.

 

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  • Ginger Woods
    December 2, 2008

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    The words just seemed to flow, a lot of poets don't understand how unique words, flow, and ideas make people want to listen even more. Some poets say generic things like "my boyfriend left me, makes me cry everynight, with your memory" for example, it could be a great poem but everybody writes that, so i'm glad to read your poem and say it's unique


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 24, 2008

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    Love the continuing metaphor throughout! Gave this a very sensual feel without being crass. Nicely done!


  • PerfectImperfection
    October 21, 2008

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    Oooh! Very nice piece you have composed from the prompted poem inspiration. Soft and sweetly intriguing, the imagery is well spun throughout. Beautiful write indeed! Best wishes in the contest!


  • DolceVito gold member
    October 21, 2008
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    Excellent write, deserving


  • sheltered
    October 21, 2008
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    sowing yer wild oats
    in the garden of Eden again?
    don't eat the brown apples!


    • lunarlunacy
      October 29, 2008
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      are they laced? LOL dont eat the brown apples, man u aint right. ehehheheheheh

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