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Winter's Cruelty

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She plead for autumn to linger a bit
so advance, mountains might permit
her lover's long awaited homecoming.

But alas, she heard a distant drumming
then eyes beheld his pine casket.

 

Now she awaits fateful basket
which holds both rope and violin;


And prays to God it's not a sin.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    this is incredibly sad, and the emotions can be felt very strongly throughout this piece. You've brought her to life, and all of her feelings as well.

    Excellent take on the prompt & your poem is outstanding

    good luck

    kat


  • MysticalRayne
    October 21, 2008

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    Wonderfully sad - I could actually feel her angst and pain through your words - you did a beautiful job with this


  • Leonura
    October 21, 2008
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    Oi, a beautiful write. something that seeps into the mind of the reader. lovely poem.


  • BeautifulFlame
    October 21, 2008

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    This was so sad but wow wonderful!
    You did this very well.

    ~Lisa~


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    October 21, 2008

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    lovely, lovely, dark and lovely!
    well done poet....
    it really had a fine tone to it!
    ears/Seattle
    loved it!


  • notorious gold member
    October 21, 2008

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    "pine casket."
    Gorgeous phrase, though melancholy. :C

    And the last line...more hard-hitting than Led Zeppelin and Nirvana combined.

    jesus.

    Good luck

    Jessicaaaa


  • lunarlunacy
    October 20, 2008
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    nice


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Wow! That's an amazing take on the pic bro! So sad, and such wonderful depth and feeling in this. You took the pic to a whole new level

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