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Her Revenge

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In woods that scream of demon dark,

She stands, outlined, serene yet stark.

This lady once the matriarch,

Now hides within the mansion’s park.

Her face, grotesque, is wane and pale,

Her voice rings out, a poignant wail.

Her withered frame is thin and frail,

And yet, tonight, she will prevail.

But she, a witch, has naught to gain,

Yet there's the house where she had lain.

She grins like one who’s gone insane,

And dreams of causing grief and pain.

The woods give up her ghostly frame,

And she without a mite of shame

Slips through the door where she’ll reclaim

Her tortured soul and long lost name.

Then once inside her words are said,

And grief and terror quickly spread.

The air and walls are splashed with red,

And those who were . . . are quickly dead.

Author notes

Something a little dark here - kind of fun

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"Death" by Maija Lahtinen

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  • taciturn69
    November 11, 2008

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    oh my god!..
    that gave me the chills!..
    it really did!..

    that was rather tasty!..
    i love you..

    cool background too..


  • Veronica Leigh
    October 29, 2008

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    Wow! This is so creepy! I love it!!! Sent shivers down my spine. Beautiful job as always. You are quite amazing


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    Awesome!! From the background to the poem, this is fantastic! Very impressive. Dark and chilling and is perfect for the image. Well done. Thanks for entering and goo luck!


  • suseann
    October 21, 2008

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    deliciously dark!

    Grand story line. What type of sonnet best describes this please? I see 8 syllables per line and have done such in the past but wasn't aware of weather it was or wasn't a sonnet form. It's cadance reminds me somewhat of "Frost's"-"Stopping in the woods" piece.Maybe quite different,but has that same appeal to me for some wonderful reason.


  • Legend silver member
    October 20, 2008
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    A great piece , a fine tale with wonderful rhyme and flow Excellent work good luck in the contest


  • TrevLove
    October 20, 2008

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    great

    great rhyming and rythem, really enjoyable! good luck!

    Fave line - "and those who were - are quickly dead"

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