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Artificial Connection

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I missed you today...
       [60 ticks past hello/goodbye]

and all the simple laughs

we could share

 

 

 

I'm learning to hate the habit....

     too many times,

            too many ways,

you turn my mind on ear...

my heartbeat took notice

 

 

 

 

 

My narcissistic skepticism

has beat me black  to blue

      [blindfolded, held hostage]

I wait....

             no words echo back- 

 

                    

 

                    now you?

 

 

 

 

Same problems, dark thoughts,

   and things I rather not say

so many things to stay dead for

until you made me haste the day

 

 

 

 

 

It couldn't be

    I can't feel, I don't feel, I won't...

one trickle of relation....no more

               it's okay

 

 

 

One mindless act

leading my sensory infection

how much longer will this last?....

 

 

this artificial connection 

 

 

Author notes

Basically people come and go...then there is that one fucker that has to show someone might understand you and throw your parade into total chaos. yea

Just be honest. If you don't get it, it wasn't for you.

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  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 2
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    This is amazing. You are truly amazing. Never failing to stun.
    Where are you?
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Festering Eye Sore
    June 12
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    Its funny, because I missed you today. I hate your habits. I hate your narcissism. I hate your problems. I hate your thoughts. And lastly, I hate your mindless actions. Yet somehow, I'm still intrigued to read more and more and see what's going on in the mind of a Menace.


  • Mariana gold member
    February 27
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    Brilliant!

    Mariana  


  • Still Standing gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    Oh I got it

    I got this loud and clear my friend. My parade has been rained on, pissed on and pooped on by that one fucker and all due to what you clearly describe as an atrifical connection!!!!!!


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 16, 2008

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    A very intriguing write. I think sometimes after that first deep cut, we spend so much time trying so hard not to feel that when we do, its frightening; to care about someone again and wonder if we have what it takes to do it all again - or if it would be just another rip to enrage the seams. That is what i got from it at least, either way I enjoyed - for it made me think (way too much). Great write!


  • Nangaleema
    October 23, 2008

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    wow! a thought provoking read. i loved the last stanza especially - really drives the whole piece home. great write. - NANGALEEMA


  • adsaige
    October 22, 2008

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    I understand very much. Sometimes though, your chaos has a meaning, and there is a sense of...understanding in that. Though it's hard for most people to get. I adore your writings and your words. Lately my works haven't been too dark, and I have my dear William and the Gluttons to thank for that. I have missed talking to you, and I wish you plenty of green gummy bears.


  • stompsalot
    October 21, 2008

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    brilliant and powerfully intense. i really enjoyed the style of this write it flows flawless and raw with gut filled emotion. you really know how to get your meaning across. well done. i will have to read more of you.
    *stomps


  • close to home
    October 21, 2008

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    Fantastic

    I really took this to heart.Its beautiful, I love the way you write. you let the pain flow freely and put it point blank. You are defentnaly one of a kind.

    Same problems, dark thoughts,
    and things I rather not say so many things to stay dead for until you made me haste the day

    This I particularly liked. We all hide our deepest secerts inside. The ones we don't want everyone to know and all it takes is one person to put you back in your hole, right when you were pullin out of it..

    Loved it
    *DANI*


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    October 21, 2008

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    It is easy to enter a comfortable state . A state in which one expects nothing more than a fleeting liason from others. Yet , at the moment one resigns himself to this fact, life deals a varied hand. Welcome an individual that relates on a completely different realm. A breadth that is understood on a personal level, a plane that is owned by one alone. Fairwell known existance , in place of comfortablity, there is now an individual that may posess the ability to relate on a personal level. It is not expected, therefore the balance of life enters turmoil. Very understandable. Fantastic insight! Yet I would expect no less from you, Sir Menace.
    Bravo!


  • Manicmuze
    October 20, 2008

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    i've wondered why we allow ourselves to be vulnerable to it, then regret it... i suppose its the intensity of getting there and that undying hope that something good might last.
    enjoyed your piece, made me think
    ~ wendy

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