A red dress to camouflage the stain
that I fought against all in vein.
For once his teeth touched me,
I lost all thought that I ought flee.
Author notes
"Beloved" by Emerald de Leeuw
A contest entry
- Dark Pics Kinda Quickie by JeannieD Hunter.
600 points, ended October 22, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very nice... I like the macabre bent you took with this... you've woven all the elements of the prompt into a smooth write...
Excellent...
Ken
PS I like the pun - vein for vain
Very clever and apropos
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Very sensual picture, loved your thoughts blessings always, best to you in the contest ~Trisha~
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wow its like when looking at the image im being drawn to the poem milking it for a meening and i got an amazing insight into the thaoughts of the victime
extremely good write
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Short yet to the point. Once bitten I think thoughts do fade away. Great take on the image. Thank you for entering and good luck!
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Yeah once the teeth sink in it's all over. lol
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