Fortnight after fortnight
Has brought us to this place
Now I hope that I might
See the beauty of your face…
Here I lie wondering what went wrong
When everything seemed to be so right
How could we be pushed this far along?
Completely out of speech; out of sight
Is the silence really worth the pain?
To make a friendship become this strained?
I never thought this could come from you
Here I thought maturity you knew
Time frames and hunches do not a line
Remember when everything was fine?
Nothing has changed since those younger days
I see the problem, with you it stays
It feels like years have passed with no word
Your voice is an angel I once heard
Pictures of you and I will not do
They bring me tears for they are not you
We can save that which we long for before it is lost forever…
Author notes
This is about me and the girl that I like. During the summer she and I had some communication issues and I vocalized my concern in the lines here.
A contest entry
- I don't know what to think anymore. by ninja girl 418.
850 points, ended December 30, 2008, 46 entries
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touching
i can relate to this very much. not just a part but the whole thing. this is an amazing piece.
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Superb plus
Aye, 'tis a fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
"Is the silence really worth the pain?
To make a friendship become this strained?
I never thought this could come from you
Here I thought maturity you knew"
i love these lines^
it's a beautiful poem and i see no fault with it [:
xxx
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Well-penned lines from life's road! My favorite phrase is: "Your voice is an angel." Hang in there!
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*jaw drops* this is like....the exact thing im dealing with...
this is crazy beautiful
Is the silence really worth the pain?
To make a friendship become this strained?
I never thought this could come from you
Here I thought maturity you knew
Amazing
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something that at the moments is hitting to close to home for me, but it was an golden read, keep it flowing
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this is great. It reminds me of my style. You took some random rhyme schemes and messed them into one. I usually do this with freeverse in it too but you get the point. "Nothing has changed since those younger days
I see the problem, with you it stays"
great line.
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you did a very good job! it really shows the communication issue between you and this girl. I hope things work out for you. i can't wait to read more.
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Here I lie wondering what went wrong
When everything seemed to be so right
How could we be pushed this far along?
Completely out of speech; out of sight
Is the silence really worth the pain?
To make a friendship become this strained?
I never thought this could come from you
Here I thought maturity you knew
I really enjoyed these lines.I know how it feels to write when you have nowhere else to turn to but your pen.Loved it
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