my body turns warm and he embraces me.
a kiss and he leaves for a moment, a quick moment.
another gulp and i'm on fire.
dropping the bottle under the bed, pills rattling softly.
i willingly drink the physician's sweet tonic in silence and tranquility.
a quick moment is always sufficient.
coming back to me, he yells.
picks me up and yells and hits my face.
but i'm still, i'm cold, i'm gone.
A contest entry
- Drug Addiction by celadia.
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you're right, an addictive personality
Comments
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wow
this is so short yet so strong
i loved this -
I liked your portrayal and theme in this piece - it was very new and uncliche in comparison to a lot that I have read in this contest (the addictive personality theme).
I think this write would be a lot of affective if you worked on making more creative phrasing to portray your emotion, or maybe imagery.
Thanks for the entry. -
this is a scary little window of your experience with drugs, thank for entering my contest.
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flatline?
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