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Sweet Summer Sunsets

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perfect pink hues
spill into view as waves
serenade soft lullabies, inviting
sparkling stars out for a moonlit dance...

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prompt sunset 20 words

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  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    Good aliteration in this vivid imagery write. Well Done!

    Dennis


  • etoile
    October 27, 2008

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    I loved this piece. the imagery was beautiful and your take on the prompt was amazing. I'm not sure if this was done on purpose, but I really like the form it made me think of a wave somehow.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • ShelleyA gold member
    October 24, 2008

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    A lovely write. Heartfelt. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.


  • righteousme
    October 21, 2008

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    awww... i loved this piece ... small and not rhymed but such a pretty scene and i wish i was there ... good luck in the contest!!!


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    October 20, 2008

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    Oh wow! This is beautiful. I totally love the imagery you create- inviting the stars out for a dance- wonderful line.

    Good luck in the contest.
    Storm


  • MysticalRayne
    October 20, 2008

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    You did a great job with this prompt - best of luck in the contest

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