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Dementia 101




stale breath and yesterday's deodorant

frantic,
pulsating eyes,
I turn my head as much is allowed
(it's not much)

insanity dances in his pupils

it's hard to believe that just thirty messages ago I was untouched

wrists tighten as I beg for release,
and his wicked grin lets me know it's not coming today,
there are more games,
evil manipulations that must be played out
across my skin

remnants of beef with broccoli and beer invade my nostrils,
(and oh, how lovely, no brushing today)
suppressing my gag reflex and trying to contain the tears
I pray silently, fervently, for my God to save me
(is that fair?)

but God can creep through the duct tape
and as my demon is preoccupied at his demented surgeon's table
I find my release (relief)
and as I slip
    I am

            gone

 

 





 

Author notes

3. “I’m so shaken up by all of this. His filthy hands of sin and bad intentions. He…He had that smell about him. That he been plotting this for awhile and he didn’t care about his hygiene. He just wanted to complete his goal - to hurt me.”

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  • Jfd
    October 27, 2008

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    This was engrossing...I eagerly read each line, unsure of where you were taking me, and loved where you took it....You have a unique writing style, this piece is fluid and full of imagery....I could be totally off, but for me, I interpreted this piece as a person stuck in his own mind, slowly deteriorating by the disease of dementia.

  • Cloudwatcher
    October 24, 2008

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    This one sucked me in from the very beginning and scared me. Not that I have a fear of beery-broccoli breath, but to see such intentions and with no visible way out... that't the stuff of nightmares.


  • Shakti
    October 23, 2008
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    wow

    Very inspirational and descriptive. It put me in that dark writing mood I yearn for- instantly!


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    very well written... what a sickness. very dark but couldnt stop reading.....`amazing


  • bloodpoet13
    October 23, 2008

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    i always love to read others dark painful poems cuz it lets me kno that im not alone in the feelings i have. loved this piece. the anguish you portray is incredible.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    October 21, 2008

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    wow

    this sent shivers up my spine. this sickness and the dark, painful emotions you have spoken of make this an excellent, yet haunting, piece


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    October 21, 2008

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    wow dark and a ndreally good, so sad to but it was so well writing i had no choice but to like it, best of luck in he contest, take care


  • thejollytinker
    October 20, 2008
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    Should've brought a blanket...

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