Soooo...
When the sun comes to rise
In the twilight of the morning
It will burn the lies
And replace the fear with mourning
Soooo...
Here I lay without you
In the stillness of the midnight
Wondering what to do
As my eyes meet the pale moonlight
Soooo...
When I wake again alone
Your m ercy will be gone
Your sins you must atone
For I'm not the haunted one
Soooo...
In spite of what you've done
I don't want this to end
The finale has begun
But maybe I can still pretend
Noooo...
I will not be haunted
This will not take me
My mind will not be taunted
And you will not break me
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This poem wqas written very well, I like it alot, i love the way it flows as well. Keep writting.
~ Chelsey
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this is great
your ending was great. i like this alot
good job :]
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third stanza is by far my fave. I know what you're going through, and it's rough, and it hurts. But it WILL get better. I promise. It's a really great write, and really emotional. Keep it up.
♪ Lillie ♪
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Great job. That 4th stanza about is about where im at, at this point in time. Moving poem.
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Thank Goodness
That fourth stanza had me a little scared i'm like noooooo and then in the fifth stanza you said the same thing. I just had a break up so this site will be my best friend for a while. I love the last stanza it shows the strength and determination we need when love goes wrong!!!!!
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I'm really proud of you for this. Not just because it was written so amazingly. <3
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Nice write man keep it up i havent been around alot till lately but now i am back as well and look foward to reading more.
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Not much has changed, as you've probably seen already. Nothing new worth reporting. Just a two-year relationship gone bad is all.
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I loved it
thinks it is a great start good writes and keep it up
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