My purpose in life is very simple,
it is to make people smile,
to chase away the fear of others,
and let the sun shine through the rain.
My purpose in life is very simple,
I'll guarantee it's true,
for if you don't believe me,
then just leave me be,
for I can manage on my own.
My purpose in life might not make sense to you,
for you see it's meant for me.
I've told you all I can for now,
the rest.....
You'll have to wait and see!
A contest entry
- Best Poems Ever by Scion.
900 points, ended October 27, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter all your poems. by Midnight-x-Rose.
700 points, ended February 20, 294 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ah, now the explanation. I have to be honest... I could've read the title of this poem and got what it was all about. Not the most creative I've seen in this contest. I think it is rather cute how you put it: your purpose is meant for you. And I understand. But as the reader (and as the judge of this contest) I can't help but feel a little cheated at the end of this. I am on my way to your next entry and am looking forward to reading your personal favorite. Cheers, Scion
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Score:
Rules-9 Structure-8.7
Title-8.2 Uniqueness-8.2
Theme-8.4 Grammar-8.8
Total-51.3 -
Wonderful poem and even better philosophy. You reming me of Thoreau for some reason. The last line is a great challange!
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Well done! This was a fun read
with a deeper meaning than a first
glance might notice. Thanks for sharing
& g'luck in the contest
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Nice write!!!!
I love your ending line! It really drives the poem home. An awesome job, and cleverly worded indeed! Bravo! Hugs to you, Grandniem
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