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Waves of Love's Abundance

O Love,
    thy essence traverses
    across unending expanses,
    seeping into hearts the world over.

Let thy waves crash
    upon unsuspecting lovers,
    laying waste to hatred's weapons ~
    unruly tongues,

    prejudices, slander,
    and other such evils born of man's sin.

Come, O Love,
    embrace us with thy waters ~
    keep us safe from harm,
    and let us drift blissfully upon thine ocean
    forever.



Author notes

40-60 Words
Option 1
"love is like a ripple in the ocean, it touches everything." -- Kat's quote..

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  • Kiddy
    March 13

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    It reminds me of Andrew Marvel’s and John Donne’s love poems. This is very nicely written. Very deep and thoughtful. Thanks for entering my contest.

    My score

    How blue it was – 9/10
    Diction – 10/10
    Theme – 9/10
    Presentation – 8/10
    Creativity – 9/10

    Total – 45/50

    Good score!! All the best in the contest!!!
    Love and regards
    Kiddy
    (Dr.Vee – Silent Judge)


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    this is an amazing piece that you've written. Your words have a way of capturing my attention, and never letting it go. I really love the last stanza, I love the whole poem but the third stanza hit me the hardest. Your words are heard loud and clear and the message this piece carries is profound.

    Brilliant take on the prompt & with your poem

    good luck

    kat


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Aww that's so beautiful! Sigh.. oh to find such a love!


  • QueenCiar
    October 20, 2008

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    I looove the way you write.
    It some what reminds me of shakespeare (with the "thy's")
    I adore shakespeare :]
    Excellent write my friend<3