Your lips brush mine
and I feel desire
wash over me.
Waves of pleasure
undulate along the
surface of my body.
Your caresses,
your soft touches,
heightened by our love,
take my breath
away until I can
only whisper….
your name.
Author notes
Option 1.
Prompt: "love is like a ripple in the ocean, it touches everything." -- Kat's quote
Picture Credit: http://thienbao.deviantart.com/art/Silent-Ripples-12073825
40 – 60 words
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie Contest.. You Up For The Challenge?? by Sweet Impatience.
1200 points, ended October 20, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome but I Won't Turn Down Fluffy One's Either :D
Comments
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Oh, pretty, pretty. Deserving of more than silver, but silver much deserved. Just a few words that deliver an opus.
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I waited to see what you came up with but alas sleep took over..
A lovely poem, telling its story in those ripples ..
Congratulations on the Silver
Julie
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Ohhhhh.. as always you write so beautifully, sensual, gentle, loving... your words here "take my breath away until I can only whisper.... your name" Just lovely!!!
Like the title too.
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this is a beautiful poem that you've written. the images this brings forth are that of a love that is gentle, and very sensual. words written from your heart.. Excellent job with both the prompt and your poem.
good luck
kat
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Lovely! Sensual with a breathless feel to it!
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hummmmm...... I bet you write something really good, creative, and wonderful! Why do I think this is becasuse I absolutely love to read your work. Can't wait to see it.
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