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Drag me out in the sunlight

Drag me out in the sunlight
and feel how it burns through my skin

Drag me out in the sunlight
What you did was an unforgivable sin

Drag me out in the sunlight
Hear my heart beat no more

Drag me out in the sunlight
I can't take this anymore

Drag me out in the sunlight
Save me from this pain

Drag me out in the sunlight baby
Don't let anything of my memories remain

Drag me out in the sunlight baby
I hate you more and more

Drag me out in the sunlight baby
You are just a stupid wh*re

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  • Jaffa-
    October 20, 2008

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    Simply amazing. I really loved how you repeated the first line of every stanza, it really made it somthing special.