The sun on my face
Instead of the rain
Moving on, the sadness
Empties from my brain
The darkness has passed
Over me at last
Lost so long, I've found inside
Eternity is a lie
There's only one life to live by
It's come to me, I don't know how
The time to live is NOW
Shining bright inside my
Heart
Is a light
Never
Extinguished
Author notes
one of my favorites i've ever written really. idk if it makes sense to anyone but me...but i really like this. unlike most of the stuff i write, i actually feel a connection with this one, like it actually describes who i am. this is how i feel right now. and i like it.
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ok so iv read it again and its true!!
it is more beautifull than the last time i read! i really love this hun x -
Wow, I really love this!
Like you stepped out of the dark and into the sun in realization. The clouds are clearing.
Awesome write truly!
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Interesting - I do like where your thoughts went with this one, while I was reading it, I felt as though I was reading a poem that had been written a few hundred years ago - it contains nuggest of priceless information like so many of the old classics, that we all read and wonder at - and give us much food for thought over!
My favourite part was most certainly,
"Lost so long, I've found inside
Eternity is a lie
There's only one life to live by"
For although my religious beliefs have me believe in Heaven, I'm more than aware that they also say we're not "human" in heaven - but rather, mere souls, so for that case, eternity as we are is a lie and indeed as you said, the only time to live is now.
I can understand why it's your favourite poem; short and concise but it says so much. Thank you for entering
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Brautiful. I enjoyed this, great job!!
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this a really beautifull poem, i had to read it twice and i know if i read it again it will sound even more beautifull, x
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The last few lines stand out the strongest... "Shining bright inside my heart is a light never extinguished". It summarizes the points you have made, this seems to me a very motivational and uplifting poem, the kind I could read to myself when I felt discouraged or sad.
Nicely done, don't stop writing
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the whole poem had amazing flow to the last 2 lines but regardless of that the poem is awesome, you are truly talented, and please don't bash your own work(talking about a couple of other pieces) every peice is a stepping stone to better things, learn from what you didn't like and apply that knowledge to future peices =]
awesome write ttyl
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