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Glass Half Empty?

Not much life left in my cup
at sixty-nine years old,
I didn’t think I’d last this long,
My expectations sure were wrong.

Oh, where has time gone?
Such joy to greet a hopeful dawn.
Thank God for yet another day
to write, to feel, to love, to play.

My pen is full; my mind is blank.
for this I have no one to thank,
my own damn fault I haven’t said
what should be shared before we’re dead.

So please young reader listen up.
This cup you sip is soon used up.
God gave us words to banish sorrow.
Write poems today and more tomorrow.

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  • Leance
    July 16

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    Awwww, very well stated. We must use the words we have today as you say as we never know when our voices will cease. Very creatively written. Thanks so much for entering the contest and best of luck.
    Leance

  • SimplySonnets gold member
    March 24

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    Your young voice will reach beyond your expectations.

    A nice sweet journey towards ... Whatever that maybe it will be different, Why fear anything you no nothing of. age is but a number. yours can get a lot higher yet.

    Loved your words, including the nice gentle rhyming patterns. Think I might have tried to avoid using up twice.

    thank you for your wisdom.


  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    March 20

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    "Write a poem today and more tomorrow" good advice to the youngsters and they should share things with their friends as you have also indicated.
    Good writing and good luck.
    Jim


  • waydownuponjoy
    March 20

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    Loved It !

    and I can sure appreciate all that you shared! Nice to find your poem and your good advice! Write on, write on! j y


  • rufina caraid gold member
    March 20

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    A lovely thought! I became very fond of a man who at 93 who still writing his own poetry and reciting classical work too, so no excuses at 69 Good advise here too, to keep on writing of love and life and anything and everything in between - enjoyed this very much. Von


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    March 20

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    when time is old our life is like gold we just can't
    sit around to see mold grow bold.lets enjoy
    poetry till we can no longer see what was told to us , to adjust ourselves to stiff bones and decayed minds,
    thank you for this entry...good luck
    mm


  • David J Martin gold member
    March 2

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    Simply amazing. I adore this poem.

    Probably unintentional, but the rhythm of your third stanza mimicked a part of Dr Seuss' 'One Fish, Two Fish, Red Fish, Blue Fish' which made the flow of your piece all the more endearing to me:

    "My hat is old.
    My teeth are gold.
    I have a bird
    I like to hold." etc

    I shall second the opinion of the lady below and say that this is definitely great advice. Very, very nicely done.

    Thank you for your entry.

    David.


  • Filia-Dei
    January 28

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    Thank you so very much! I love this poem!

    You're awesome, no words, that was just a brilliant write, and very positive and uplifting, exactly what I wanted to hear!

    YOU ROCK! I don't think I would change anything, I really like it, it just works! Well done!
    I really like the rhyme in the second last stanza, its so true, and you really did this well!

    Good luck in my contest! And I hope God continues to bless you!


  • echo-ink
    January 6
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    Good rhyme, great advice, so truthful.
    Thanks for entering.


  • Chazz
    December 10, 2008

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    A beautiful poem to share with the world! This is the reason I have given my muse a second chance. I know she'll give up and some back to me some day. Once that happens, I'll once again be sharing my thoughts and words with everyone! Thanks so much for your entry and the help!


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    November 23, 2008

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    Superb plus

    Ah, yes, as a Senior Citizen, myself, I can certainly relate to what you have written. I wrote one called "Maple Leaves", which you might enjoy.
    Here's a link to it:
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/3510428


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    November 1, 2008

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    This is such a wonderful write, I really enjoyed reading through this. Well done and all the best for my contest.

  • misticmoonlite gold member
    October 28, 2008
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    nice

    at any age you appreciate each moment, when threats were against and no breathe to rely on,you sure learn fast, nice piece to read of encouragement, good luck in her contest


  • arafura gold member
    October 21, 2008
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    Great work! I can't suggest a thing I'd change.


  • catz Moderators member
    October 20, 2008

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    What a meaningful poem And such wisdom filled advice.
    I recently turned 71 and I'm still learning to make each moment count and not worry about things.

    Thank you for your lovely entry

    Dee


  • RealitysAStory
    October 20, 2008
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    FANTASTIC!!!

    Great rhymes, great lessons, great words, great concepts. Completely outstanding work. Thanks for sharing it with me.

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