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2 souls that hurt

2 souls that hurt 20.10.08

Cheese they say. But I can't smile
My laughter’s gone astray
And all the world of wonder has left me on this day
I'll not deny the anguish
That rips right through my heart
And in the end that thunder
That tears my soul apart
This thunder rumbles even stronger,
Day by day... night by night,
If only it was easy to keep it hidden away,
Though if you suffered you would really understand,
This is no laughing joke to suffer this way!

Bob Fox and Selfexpressive.

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  • Selfexpressive
    October 20, 2008
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    Bob... I am honoured and feel privalaged to have done this poem with you my friend... that I mean from the bottom of my heart... and indeed yes, its a honest piece of writing... I totally agree with you... thank you my friend...

    Selfexpressive aka Karen xxx

  • Bob Fox
    October 20, 2008
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    Karen

    It is a fine honest piece of writing. The heart trembles at times and the soul longs for release.