Be true to me my Queen and I shall be
Your knight as brave as seen in days of yore
See where your knight has been across the sea
For I have seen colleens worth fighting for
I bow before the steel that's in your eye
Show me that all is real that's put on show
By all that I can feel I'll not pass by
Know that I'll not reveal that which I know
Where I have lived we know the crown you wear
Bright Queen would you bestow your honour bright
Fair maiden would you show me all that's fair
Write me a verse as though that were the rite
You have to hear me make this pledge to you
True love will never break from one that's true
Author notes
A proposal to the Queen of Form in her own form, a shadow sonnet, internally rhymed, of course.
A contest entry
- Men Only by Amera.
2000 points, ended November 3, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Not bad Jeff, not bad!
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How delightful is this. Like a fantasy come to life. it looks like something you would find at the end of a rainbow or tumbling off the strings of an old Irish harp. Fantastic.
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I feel so stupid reading something as majestic as this. And it is majestic in my opinion.
I bow before the steel that's in your eye
Show me that all is real that's put on show
By all that I can feel I'll not pass by
Know that I'll not reveal that which I know
Thats incredible!
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This poet seems to have lots of inside information for a newbie. Hmmmm. I like the background. It is a shadow sonnet. It has internal rhyme. I like it. Good luck.
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The fame of Amera Eileithyia is great amongst elves. She is known and loved across all lands on both sides of the seas, curved and straight.
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Harani a'kaheyla de'shanuay
Ok! Now comes a guy with an elfin name who writes me a poem in my own Shadow Sonnet form. What am I to think? Could we possibly spend endless evenings whispering elfin love poems to each other? Would he protect my honor with his magic sword? This will take some serious consideration.
Love,
Amera
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My sword and honour would defend you against all at all times. As AP Wife or simply as a lady.
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i can't believe i'm the first to comment on this lovely poem. i almost feel like i am invading on Amera's space! lol She is so beautiful (look at that background!) and such a wonderful poetess...Good luck
to you Love, Lane
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