Your leaving,
and there is nothing I can say.
We're grieving,
that your going away.
We hope to hear from you when you get back,
but just know that we will be sad.
If you really must go,
we will understand.
But deep, down, below
you were to us all - grand!
Its Your time to go,
What do I say?
Author notes
We will miss ya! Can't wait till you get back!
A contest entry
- Time to Go by Titus.
500 points, ended November 4, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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very beautiful
amazing job
thanks for entering
<33 meme -
Sweet poem, sounds like a good one for many to read or hear when they have to go anywhere, especially when they wont be able to talk to anyone for a bit. Makes you feel special and very loved.
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Very good write for a 'goodbye' poem.
But deep, down, below
you were to us all - grand!
It sounds great up to that point.
I think it sounds a little rough.
Don't change it for me though.
I am just stating my opinion.
It's great the way it is. -
well, sometimes, the least you read has the lasting effect, and while I can read it time and time again, I guess I shall be shedding a tear more often, Thank you for the thought. Tony
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