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c r a c k e d .

Her brittle nails scrape against the bars of her cage.
She is fighting to focus but her eyes keep rolling to the back of her head.
Barely alive in a violent sea of thoughts, she is suffocating in dizzy spells of worry
Almost unconscious and suspended in filth she pleads for a way out
And yet she gladly chokes on the key that caged her in.

An addict.

Savagely raped by reality, she finds refuge in her dreams through a dirty needle.

Pathetic.

But now she says she is tired of sleeping. She wants awake.
Even if it is in a bed of shame, a room of darkness, an ocean of guilt, a pit of misery
Or a box of regret; she needs it.

She is refusing to eat; only fasting and gnawing at her iron shackles in an angered prayer.

The numbing pain is cracking her mind forcing her to creep in and out of insanity
As her tears lie pleasantly arranged at her feet displaying her emptiness in a fading reflection
And in her desperate image she finds the answer written on the punctures in her veins.

Worthlessness heated on a spoon with a black flame,
Is shown the path through a tight rubber leash.

Exhilaration.

As cold metal strokes her even colder flesh, the dizzy spells cease and warmth rushes her heart
Slipping sweet release inside her, the pain was delightful, psychadelic, seductive -ORGASMIC

But then it wiltered with her pulse

Nothing.

just another beautiful smile left on the cold blue lips of another

Worthless corpse.


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  • Travel Notes
    October 25, 2008
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    A very powerful piece about addiction and the way it utterly consumes people inside and out.


    An addict.

    Savagely raped by reality, she finds refuge in her dreams through a dirty needle.

    Pathetic.

    The form of a few lines of description followed by a sharp single word gives this a lot of emphasis.


  • Blank Page
    October 20, 2008
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    Thanks I really appreciat it! Ill return the favor, i just need sleep After none for 24 hours : )

  • NomDePlume silver member
    October 20, 2008
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    Great Write!

    I can feel the intoned passion of regret and impending death.
    Bravo!