wilderness of abandonment (gold)

Hidden under hooded veil
she wears her tears
like an expensive string of pearls
laying across a chest that refuses to rise or fall

As breath eludes being caught
she watches love disappear
into the wilderness of abandonment
she can not bear to follow
heartache enough to snap string
letting pearls fall
in desperation

Author notes

50-70 words on the contest picture prompt

Please credit the artist : My lost jewels By Floranda on Deviant art

A contest entry

Write me something spectacular - Quickie by MysticalRayne. 675 points, ended November 3, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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carole21
November 4, 2008
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nicely done . . congrats on the gold !!
MysticalRayne
October 22, 2008

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This is magnificent - and just what I was looking for - beautiful - best of luck in the contest. I love your use of strands of pearls to connect the metaphor for the spider web - bravo
Lavender Butterfly
October 21, 2008

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How immensely gripping and powerfully worded. Such strong imagery and emotion within. Well penned and best wishes. Love you loads, your sister always, Gypsy-Princess... x
Manda Kathryn
October 20, 2008

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I love the final two lines; the power they alone pocess is gripping and makes me read the poem again and again

Best of Luck
♥
Stay safe
Love to You
~Manda
thejollytinker
October 20, 2008

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Damned pearls always falling off- somebody's gonna trip on them... Loved it, babe! Only thing is your title is missing the "m." Breath eluding capture, shoot me, please...
chilali
October 20, 2008

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And again, a nice take on the picture! Great work. Best to you in this contest!