Your departure
lingers on my heart,
Missing you,
I'm softly crying,
Lost, defeated,
How could Heaven
take you from me?
Author notes
A woman loses her partner somehow through death and she wakes on their anniversery reminded of her husband's departure, a truly bittersweet moment, hope you like this 
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A contest entry
- Bittersweet by Lavender Butterfly.
550 points, ended October 20, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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beautifully penned... and i do love it altho its so sad,
hugs,
georgie,
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This is a great poem it is easy to read although it is sad it is written from the heart and the meaning very thought through. This poem gives one cause for reflection and makes one think about the important things in life like love. In this poem is the underlying experience of sadness and shock when a loved one dies suddenly. I have experienced the death of my best friend who was 31 at the time. She died suddenly of a brain tumour and the loss it leaves is unbearable. The poem has a nightmarish, shock and overall loss feeling. I like the way you use short stanzas, lines and rhyme to create a poem that can relate to the feelings one experiences when they lose a loved one.
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Beautiful write hun. So much said in so few words. Loved it. xds-gx
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This is just how bittersweet love is. You word this so beautifully, I found a tear in my eye at her pain. Best to you in the contest
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so sad and grasping... x
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Nice job on bittersweet, I'd change the form a bit in my opinion..leave 'missing you' as one line then start the 'I'm on the next with softly crying, same with the last, 'how could heaven..one line...take you from me...last line
it spaces the poem better. Good luck 
MM
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Thanks i'll go edit now
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