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Hush Little Baby

Hush little baby, don't you cry,
listen to love's sweet lullaby.
Hush little baby, don't be sad,
he loves us really, your crazy dad.

Hush little baby, don't you scream,
we'll wake up and this will just be a dream.
Hush little baby, no sound from you,
don't give him reason to hurt you, too.

Hush little baby, close your eyes,
don't think about the slaps and cries.
Hush little baby, lie nice and still,
he'll stop hitting you soon, I promise he will.

Sweet little baby, just one breath,
your dad wouldn't send you to your death.
Sweet little baby, don't you die,
just listen to Mummy's lullaby...

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  • loud whispers
    July 24
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    this is beautiful.. it has made me cry. such sadness and truth.
    welldone


  • Suteishiijein
    June 10
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    wow

    aww made me cry..... I relate to this....


  • ButterflyPhoenix
    May 13
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    Wonderful

    such great imagery!


  • igraine
    March 12

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    This is horrifically beautiful.
    Loved the irony of the words within the context of a soothing lullaby.

  • Basti
    March 10

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    Wow, this is truly amazing.
    Taking the original lullaby and transforming it in this way and changing the meaning so greatly, while still keeping elements of the original is exceptionally great.

    Please keep up the good work

  • sleepinglion
    March 7
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    undescribable

    We have a common thread here, the monster in our head
    Regards David


  • PandorasBox
    March 5

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    This is so powerfully sad...and it cuts me to the core because that is the reason I left my abusive ex- to protect my child...an amazing job


  • fairytalelovestory
    March 3
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    sad, yet beautiful


  • Captain Amber SL
    February 21

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    I love this. Firstly, because it has great poetic contest, flowing brilliantly. The rhyming, though simple, is flawless. And secondly, the topic strikes straight to my core, the story of the person that needs to protect others. It's heartfelt and beautiful.

    One line that broke the flow of the poem a little was the line "He'll stop hitting you soon, I promise he will." The meter is a little off here, ad disrupts the otherwise perfect flow of the poem.

    I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^

    Aeris Silverlight

  • klippies
    February 20

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    When at first I read your Poem, I loved the cry & lullaby, the sad & dad. I felt comfortable reading a piece that flow, easy reading, same type of thing I would have done .... or so I thought, I believe good writing somehow intensify when the writer use real life experience, the fear & terror, pain .... By the time I finished reading I had to find out more, relieved to find that your experience is drawn from "Poets against child abuse" and that you seem happy. I am not an expert and very new to the site, but I do have some life experience, given your age, fairly young, I think you have true compassion and an amazing talent. Don't ever stop writing, this is a fantastic piece !!!


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    wow, that is such a sad piece, it brought tears to my eyes as i can really relate, this has to be one of the most meaningful poems i've read in a long time.


  • eleno
    November 11, 2008
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    this is .. one hell of a lullaby.. sad.. so very sad. greatly written. keep it up


  • XXxFAKExXx
    November 7, 2008

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    ;O
    amazing poem!
    I'm speechless..
    Everything in this poem was amazing.
    Really sad and depressing poem though.
    But also one of the best I have ever read in my whole life.


  • BeAuT1FuLlyXxBrOkEn
    November 5, 2008

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    Wow. I just had to close my eyes and take a deep breath after finishing this...I must say, this is AMAZINGLY written. Unfortunately, it drew a tear to my eye, because I was in an abusive relationship, and everytime my daughter started crying I would just beg her stop please stop before he starts on you too...I always jumped in, and ended up getting the worst end of it, but i didnt care i had to protect my baby. Anyways, you dont wanna know my life story...great job


  • littlemissrose
    November 4, 2008

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    very upsetting, would have to be the deepest meeningfull poem i have read in a long time, makes you sad to think it is actually true in so many cases, well done


  • DistilledGin
    October 29, 2008
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    Disturbing

    I love the idea, and the rhyme... but I don't understand how a mother could not do anything... Would you really just stand aside and let a man beat your baby to death?? I'd give my life for my child.. But it's up to you... anywayz, this is a good write...


  • MissErinMichelle
    October 23, 2008

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    Sad

    Tears are still running while I'm thinking of this harsh reality. We're allowed the freedom to express ourselves, but so often we stick to what's safe. I'm so glad you don't. That is very important as a writer and you're a great one.


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    October 22, 2008

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    Oh wow, very chilling. So dark yet unfortunately it happens to be true in most cases. An amazing job you did with this.

    Take care


  • WolfHeart
    October 21, 2008

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    Nausea surges through me. You have elegantly depicted the situation of abuse. As a 10 year survivor I never thought I would read something that pushed pins through my brain. Your lovely singsong rhythm and absence of harsh lines just makes the poem all the stronger. Most excellent.


  • Girl Mad As Birds
    October 20, 2008
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    Fuck me, man, that sent shivers down my spine. Damn it's good to have you back!


  • soapbox99
    October 20, 2008

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    twisted

    how disturbed of you me thinks you need a hug and some goodlieness juice. love you hun not a bad effort. let it be known i wnt be reading that to lieth as a bead time lulabie. to be honest i couldnt think whati wuld do to revise this its tiwsted cool. MWAH <3

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