Edward, my vampire lover
Whose body glistens like stars in the night
Watching me for protection
Against the raging wars outside
Loving me,Bella a mortal for affection
I run with you through the forest
Can't escape your amber gaze
But blood flows through my heart
As we soar through the mystic maze
I thought moving to Forks would be dull and drab
But it was the most unexpected experience
That I have ever had
You are like a vial of elixir beckoning
The taste sweet as wine
Body,soul, and blood
All temptation to me
My life as a vampire confined
Time flies by
I sit and wait
Take me,make me yours
Before the coming dawn
I am on my knees
Confessing my sins
Your cold hand touches mine so soft
When we touch my heart sings
Instantly in love with you
I am lost
We love before sunrise
Awakening our desire
I love you unconditional
Through time, through hell,through fire
Author notes
My Allpoetry user name is Blushfulmoon
My favorite vampire is Alice...
A contest entry
- Twilight by Maili Knephthan.
650 points, ended October 27, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - O.T.S. ( Obsesive Twilight Syndrom ) by SimplyNoodle.
550 points, ended December 31, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Congratulations on winning the Silver Trophy and an Honorable Mention, Sis!
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Love Ya!
♥ Maureen
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Congratulations on the HM sis. I enjoyed this a lot. I am going to watch this movie. I've heard so much about the books. They sound great.
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Well Done
sensual and romantic. the ebb and flow sensuous like the sea warm like the night and the imagery perfection. words chosed well and used to perfectionGreat Job
Go with God sweet sis,
Valerie
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congratulations on your honormaralisa
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this is a thoroughly enjoyable read. like vampire poetry that reads so gently, thank you for sharing...
nice win, congrats my sweet sis
Voe
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Oooooooooooooh~
Wowzers Sis this is a Beauty of a piece penned and I have yet to see this movie
Oy!
You have Inspired me to want and watch
Love this!! Excellent~
Congratulations on Your HM!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Keep that quill dancing Precious~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Wonderful
Wow, so powerful and descriptive. What a great creation. Best of luck in the contest. -
Whose body glistens like stars in the night
This line is my favourite, the imagery just grabbed me and from there the poem is good. I also like the way it sort of rhymes, but is also kind of freeverse.
Very good job, maybe a little work to be done on placing of certain words, but other than that it is quite good.
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In all fairness I had to return to reread. You have done wonderfully with the prompt and stayed true to the story. Congats and hats off to you and the HM. LOL I'll know now not to attempt a read on my meds.....
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Very nicely done. I have read only two of the books but I look forward to reading even more of them. This tells the story of their love very well. Thank you for entering.
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excellent!
You tell of this love so well in your poem. The books must be really good if you can't put them down. Maybe I will read them.
The poem flows smoothly,and I especially like this line:
"You are like a vial of elixir beckoning"
Good luck in this contest!
Jeannette 
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You did a wonderful job with this sis. I loved the imagery.....
All the best in the contest and thanks for the link.
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Wow this was nice! I really loved these lines:
"I run with you through the forest
Can't escape your amber gaze
But blood flows through my heart
As we soar through the mystic maze"
Good job and good luck to you as well!!
~NekoFelix~
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Very sensual. It certainly portrays lust and deception which is what vampires offer. I think your muse is back. Very appropriate for the season.
I've been concerned for you. I hope all is well. Missed you.
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You write with such a gifted pen my friend. Always a joy to read. You knocked this one outta the park
Best of luck!
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Nicely done for the subject. Best to you in contest.
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You do the most amazing things with poetry, dear one. A fine fantasy you have penned and I enjoyed reading it very much. A beauty, as are all your poems.
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a beautiful poem your imagery is wonderful good luck in the contest thank you for sharing
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i like this very much. Your poems are always very beautifully composed. and this one's one of my favourite subjects too. i havn't read any of the twilight series books yet. but i am devouring all of Anne Rice's books. i really love her work. great work here on this piece...as always you rock.
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It amazes me, Susan, how you can write on so many different subjects so well. This is an engaging poem. That last line is pure gold.
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Excellent
Oh my this was great. You did fantastic. Best of luck in the contest.
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