Drifting on the surface, I long for some depth.
I crave for some passion, but I float like driftwood,
unable to sink to my happy place you detest.
My thighs are frozen open
as your hardness melts the ice.
What you perceive as my wetness
is just another opening for my soul to cry.
And when you bathe in me, I know it's only skin deep.
Materialism and cloning; with silicone you’ve poisoned me,
but you can never take what is mine while I sleep.
The murkiness of your water is so shallow, too perfect
for your size nine Born to choke the life out of me;
it accomplishes its job; damning me in suburbia.
Life’s simple pleasures you’ve chased off and robbed.
So like a geisha you decorate me in glitter to parade,
never admiring the beauty of how the Cherry Blossoms sway.
Like the leaves in Autumn, they wither and fall,
leaving me in my dreadful thoughts; alone in my head I claw.
And you nag and tear the sweetness from these trees,
injecting your dry rot dormant disease.
Soon the ants come marching one by one,
feeding off dreams, and burying decaying memories.
And I scream in my head for someone to bash in my brain,
for a lunatic is created; she is tired of being tamed.
I'd rather burn in purgatory than keep this promise that I've made;
but these little shadows that follow me,
they need me to breathe,
I’m chained by their love,
“Mommy please don’t leave!”
So, in a coma, I lay here blocking reality's sound of defeat.
I open my eyes and grin, while you sleep in your cum-stained sheets.
As another day unfolds, and you tie on my strings
I'll live like a ten year old and play make believe.
There is a mat on my door that says, "Welcome Home."
But if you flip if over it says, "Help, I'm trapped in Silicone!"
Author notes
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what do you think.
Comments
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there is such great raw emotion and fantastic detail, good luck in the contest
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I coulf identify with this a few years ago.. wonderful write thanks so much for your entry!
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Wow, a very emotional and powerful write. Those last two lines are really wow. Good job with this.
Best of luck and thanks for entering.
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There is a mat on my door that says, "Welcome Home."
But if you flip if over it says, "Help, I'm trapped in Silicone!"
that is lovely. FINALIST -
Shattering
Powerful---pretty real assessment.
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EXTREMELY well written. This is brilliant! GREAT job!
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Painful and well written. If this really is your life then I am very sorry for you. And I have something I am compelled to say. I come from a broken home...long story and not really important now. But I am glad that my family fell apart rather than held itself together just for me...If you suffered for your children, and they found out....it is possible and even likely they will blame themselves later and hate themselves for it. I know I have never forgiven myself for allowing some of the things to happen that did...I try to say I was too young to know better, but the words sound so hollow when I see the scars....I dunno.
Anyway, so long as you LOVE them and are there for them, then you shouldn't have to suffer in a life like that...thats just my opinion.
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wow lots of trophies for this one
Great Write and
Thank You for entering my contest
Good Luck
-♥Amanda♥
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I love this piece, it has so much imagery, pain and emotion trapped between the lines, being set free by your beautiful words. I especially loved the ending, with the allusion to the welcome mat. This was truly amazing, well done!
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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Took my breath away
Absolutley brilliant. I love it. You have written this extremely well. Thank you so much for sharing such a vivid and intense piece. I can relate with this. Thanks for entering my contest x -
wow this is really really good. Nice write...
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absolutly excellent poetry-congrats on your trophy-well deserved.
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Holy SH*T. Amazing! That's all I can say! Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck. It's an honor to have you show your work here.
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Painful truths/excellent
Thank you for entering my contest "SATIN SHEETS" with your gold trophy winning poem. Please look at the spelling on "swallow" i THINK you mean "shallow". If so, please correct this skillful entry.
"is so swallow, too perfectis so swallow,"
"they need me to breath," love,
I think you mean "breathe" not "breath?"
Please note your poem Edited or im and advise that the corrections have been made. This is a finalist piece.
Best of life,
liquid
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ty for catching those errors, it's crazy how many times ive read this and ive never caught it, and thank you for enjoying it. errors are corrected
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Wow, for a poem written on the basis
of death, this was F**king beautiful!!!
(pardon my french)
Left me completely breathless
.. amazing.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Amazing. Breathtaking.
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Wow! Such amazing imagery and words you used here! It's absolutely perfect. Great job!
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thank you so much for your kind words, im thrilled you enjoyed it
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cool, pretty deep. I liked it. good luck
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DAMN!!
DEEP DEEP DEEP!!! WOW, I'M SPEECHLESS! This is so dark, yet so excellently penned..
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment, thank you for reading my work
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i can really relate to this....i'd rather burn in purgatory than keep this promise i made...one hundred percent...awesome write!!
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Oh my...
This poem is AMAZING.
I don't know what to say. The words are perfect, it flows like a silent song. It is so dark, but beautiful. Beauty is a funny thing, isn't it? It comes from the ugliest things...
I'd say good luck, but you don't need it.
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Wow.
That was the first thing that certainly came to mind. What a moving piece. Your ability to weave the concept through so many different occupations and possibilities is truly a remarkable talent. Bravo.
I must admit, this is a very deep piece - one that I didn't expect to surface into the contest. So, in that regard, thank you for submitting it. Wonderfully done.
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Wow, erm i dont really know what to say. this is one hell of an amazing write. Your word choice is impeciable, the way this flows, is amazing, and the emotion and intensity portrayed is absolutly fantastic. I am so impressed with this,....i am so sorry you have been through so much hell, that your life/is and was so hard. I can really relate to this poem but would never be able to write as you have. Such an amazing write! i am lost for words. You have so much talent it is unbelievable. I hope you find some peace. Thank you for entering my contest i am truly honoured
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Please put your name & inspiration in the AN!
This is one of my personal favorites of the year - one I have read more than once. But, if the name & inspiration is not in the AN, I can't award it a winning trophy
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This is beautiful and tormented. You put a lot of thoughts and feelings in here, and really make the reader feel your confusion. I can relate...
~HH
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Very nice.
Thanks for entering =]
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Wow, I don't know what to say, but this is an impressional piece, and your title is defining thanks for your entry
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woah
that is alot to take in. i like it alot. i can relate in some ways.
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first verse is great best of luck
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I'm speechless! magnificent works!
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this was very painful to read. It almost sounds like a mand with one of those too realistic dolls and then it starts ounding like a wife is is just uncaring and lets him screw her night after night anyway ... he uncaring except fot the sexual release. Well written and emotive.
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water is so swallow -> to swallow (?)
then keep this promise ->than
Too sad...to think that this is normal, or could even exist, and to know full well that it does is even more sad. Excellent write. It shouldn't even be a thought though -
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ty for your comment, made proper corrections
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wow this may not be my usual kind of read, but i liked it, it is so well written, so sad, but powerful, best of luck in the contest
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WOW!!
I dont know what to say. It was so deep and it explain so much pain. It kept me wanting to read more and more. You did an excellent job in this contest. Good luck and thanks for entering
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I'm speechless and this rarely happens.. I just joined a couple days ago and have been reading poetry like its my job but this my dear kept me enthralled. I've never read anything so emotionally heated.. I love it !
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ty very much for reading my work
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ouch. that was scary. and amazingly written well done! i love the last two lines the best good luck
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Wow, very expressive.
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Sorry you feel so sad..
You have created a beautiful write, though. No one wants to be taken for granted, and it sounds like you're treated like a Stepford Wife.
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I could be biased but this is brilliant in its trauma. I have read some of your work once or twice before but nothing has caught my attention like this one. There are a number of remarkable lines that leave me gasping...such as:
"So like a geisha you decorate me in glitter to parade."
"But these little shadows that follow me,
they need me to breath, I’m chain by their love,
“Mommy please don’t leave.”"
(Although you may have meant "chained by their love")
And the ending. Good grief. I am enthralled.
Thank you for your entry and good luck
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Amazing write my friend deep had a load of emotion.
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Very nice write. It's deep and emotional. Good luck. =]
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That disconnected life is always hell, and you have given it a wonderful voice. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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Such a sad life that so many live while their partner is oblivious to what is in front of them.
Well Done
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Wow, this is very emotional, I really like the way you've written it, it is very deep. Best of luck in the contest.
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wow...
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Great write, it is. i like your word usage. Thanks for entering
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So very sad... a wonderful poem none the less. Thank you for entering.
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Well...um...
I can't believe this has never won a trophy!
Perhaps it's because of an error in spelling?
Not to worry, I hold Poem contests, not spelling bees,
Finals...loved it.
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oh wow. ur a great poet. lolz. thanx for entering and good luck!
*hugs* tay/tess.
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really deep
I had to read it twice to be sure I got the same meaning,like a geisha you decorate me in glitter to parade,made it clear to me.good write.
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wow. this was so powerful and straightforward, ina way. im not sure what option you chose, it would be amazing if you could message me your option?
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A good poem.
I receive the impression the poet is crying for help! A person desperate to escape from the confinements of marriage.
A good descriptive poem.
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