He had it all, the life he dreamed of.
A wife, a daughter, a home with a dog.
All the things he'd never had as a child.
Security, and love, he had it all.
One wrong turn, it was gone.
The drug brought out all his fears,
His worst nightmare came to life.
It wasn't fun. He lost it all in one night.
His friend gave him some K, some friend
he turned out to be. Told him it would
be a great high. Lies, nothing but lies
were told to him. He believed,
How he wanted to believe.
He never made it back from the brink.
He stood at the edge of the abyss,
and he fell in. All the fears that he
grew up with came back to haunt
him, without relent. He was lost, and alone.
A door kicked in, a bedroom trashed.
A frightened child staring back at him.
He ran, but could not outrun that image.
It haunted him both day and night.
He had screwed up, and he lost it all.
Incoherent ramblings to friends,
Talking of a job, a dog and a home that
were no longer his. Reality a
place on the horizon that he just can't reach.
A contest entry
- Addiction by poetryality.
900 points, ended November 14, 2008, 24 entries
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''Reality a place on the horizon that he just can't reach.''
wow..great line, reminds me of alice and the red queen.
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Other than the repetition of the word "he", I felt an urgency to get these feelings to the surface, to get those thoughts from his heart. I feel the see-saw in your words, the indecision, yes...all addictive behaviors. Whew! Excellent! Thank you for the reminder. I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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He lost it all.. Sad but true for those that lose their way through drugs.. I watched it happen to my son.. I thought I was losing my mind when things weren't where i put them.. My tools disappeared.. It must have been that someone else got into the garage... Expensive coats..left at someones house?.. Kids coming over but only staying a few minutes.. I was naive for a long time.. But eventually it cost him everything and me quite a bit just from association..I was even his unwitting enabler.. With things like.."Here's twenty bucks. Take your friend out, have a good time."
I hope this isn't someone in your family.
Very good write. good luck!
Den
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Outstanding!
Once one's in the K hole, the beginning of the circle is hard to find. The moment of engagement for me was definitely the last stanza, it tied everything together.
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Well said!
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You got right to it and told it as it is. Good write.
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Good write
Stark naked truth
deserving
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Brilliant!!!
Wishing you the best of luck in the contest!!
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Yes. You have captured the chaos in the mind of the addict particularly well. Great work!
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