sangre,
flue a las venas-
al hogar
sweet blood,
flow to my veins-
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a mother finds and cradles the body of her son, who committed suicide. i need to make longer versions of these.
A contest entry
- speak to me in 7/7/7 ♥ part II by Immortal Obscurity.
500 points, ended October 19, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i love criticism.
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Uh, hell yeah you do.
But at the same time, you are so wonderful with brevity it kills. You know just how to say it. You created imagery, deep emotion, tragedy, love, and metaphor... all into seven words. You bitch. XD
Jeanette*~
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so so good!
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Wow, Lovely.. What language is that? sorry. It's awesome as...
And a very sad back story to it..
Congratulations on the Silver.
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oh, i meant the title's italian, the language i speak is spanish. haha sorry, it's late and my brain is dead.
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it's italian. i don't speak it, but pietà is a theme in mediaeval christian art, centred on mary cradling jesus' body... thought it was fitting for the title. thank you
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Lol... It's ok. Good thing I got both the messages at the same time. lol, made more sense. Anyway - it's sweet as that you can speak spanish. Would love to be able to write in other languages, I think I need to learn them fully first, Whoop Whoop. Anyway- thanks for clearing up the language issue, I'll stop babbling now and leave you be.
Congrats on the silver again.
Claire-Anne
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Tease
Well done - I too look forward to the culmination of your thoughts...
Ken
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so sad
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Such a sad story! I eagerly anticipate the full version, with baited breath... Well done
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write faster!
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