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Demonize me.

 

 

Whether it be.....

the scratch of the razor

or the claws of agony.

One thing you can be certain;

mankinds pride and history

pleads to demonize.

 

In this feast

reaping power I receive.

Drained, devoured,

sipped and savored,

mortal breath eternally

breeds me STRONGER.

 

Shoot me up,

or drink it down.

I'll be your sweet guilt-free

seductive remedy.

Sleep all day and play all night

I'll in-flate you endlessly.

 

Soft cashmere blankets

woven carefully,

swaddle self-denials tight,

unto dark cribs of sleep.

 

Hell, would only be to happy

to sing their lullabyes

of self-pity each and every night.

 

My dear sweet child

don't blame yourself

Demonize and lavish

it.... ALL...... unto me.

 

No friend of hell..

is mankinds...WILL...

Demonize me.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Akari
    November 14, 2008

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    Interesting.

    This is kinda a scary right but i like it. You did a wonderful job with this prompt. and I hope you had fun with it. Great Job and Keep up the Great Work.

    -ScarletFox-


  • Scyphon
    November 12, 2008

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    Very true... pride is a great downfall to us. People always causing pain because they feel they are the best.


  • FlamesDragoness
    October 29, 2008
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    i hear ya ...sis JFD...this one creeped me out too!


  • Jfd
    October 23, 2008

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    "Shoot me up,
    or drink it down.
    I'll be your sweet guilt-free
    seductive remedy.
    Sleep all day and play all night
    I'll in-flate you endlessly"

    Flawless, absolutely loved that stanza....it's something that I can relate to and put into words that I would have never thought of.....you really have a way to use words that aren't associated with darkness, yet you integrate them in a clever way that makes it fit smoothly with dark themes.


  • nature mithya
    October 20, 2008

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    You have a killer instinct with soft words as dew.

    True, life does teach us the essence of life and demons, vampires grow out of us to consume this hell of a world.

    Congrats.
    A lovely write interweaving the living and the demon to take a fancy flight.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Dark and compelling, a Hell almost worth exploring! Rich use of images and great word choices -- I almost felt like this rhymed, but it didn't. Your meter must be quite good! An intriguing read. Good luck in the contest.


  • MarZ101
    October 19, 2008
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    Beautiful

    This was...definitely creative. I love it.


  • Dark Otter
    October 19, 2008

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    Damnably good!

    Hell hath no fury like a poet in a creative frenzy. First thought is this a response to what I said. It made me laugh that's a good sign. I think others will like it, too.

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