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Troubled Love

The troubled love of a young teenager
Too young in fact to see the path
that he or she has taken
and down that narrow road, there lies
a broken heart waiting to be found.

The troubled love of a young teenager
to naive to see the disruption of their
actions, one left turn which should
of been a right, and your heart is
in a fright.

 

looking and searching for Mr. or Mrs. right,
now to see that your nothing but a seed,
in this enormous world, which you thought
you had in the palms of your hands.

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  • Shannon62875
    November 3, 2008
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    awww

    This is really good!!! It expressed so many emotions in this short little poem... Exactly how all teenagers end up feeling... You did a great job! Keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!!!

    Shannon*Leah


  • Shannon62875
    October 20, 2008

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    well...

    This was a very short, but good write... You did a really good job expressing how you feel.. It had a good rhythem even without the rhyming... Keep up the great work! Good luck in my contest!
    SHannon*Leah


  • kathykool
    October 20, 2008

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    its really good... especially since its your first poem!!!! good job and keep writing!! please check out some of my poems!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • kel dog
    October 19, 2008
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    his is a great write. many teens have lots of love problems. just the way of life.