This absence in my heart
I’ve never felt this aching
It feels like I’m dying
Like my soul is breaking
How could he do that?
Throw away our two years
Holding myself together
I just can’t stop the tears
Now he wanted someone else
So I was cast aside
This inexplicable pain I feel
It’s impossible to hide
How can I continue on?
Taking one wrong day at a time
No matter what I think about
He just won’t leave my mind
It’s more hurtful than a gun shot
So much sharper than a nail
My knees are weak, my eyes give out
My heart is getting frail
Only time will mend this ache
Or so they seem to say
I think it might be possible
To love again someday
Author notes
'Tired eyes rarely see a good future.' -Mike Murdock. I chose option 1. Love
I chose option 2d. Hope you like this.
Because of Brian 
Ap Name is "L i t t l e M i s s M e n t a l"
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awwwwwwww
*hug this is sad and yet great -
Very sad, and beautifully written! You did well with the rhyme, too. Thanks for the comment on "The Bodies I Claim"!!!
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It's sad, but beautifully so. I can feel the emotion and it's so....sad!
"It’s more hurtful than a gun shot
So much sharper than a nail
My knees are weak, my eyes give out
My heart is getting frail
Only time will mend this ache
Or so they seem to say
I think it might be possible
To love again someday"
This is just beautiful -
Very sad!
Sounds good, makes me feel this pain, the one you loved/love who makes you cry… your place now someone else had occupied…
“Now he wanted someone else
So I was cast aside
This inexplicable pain I feel
It’s impossible to hide
How can I continue on?
Taking one wrong day at a time
No matter what I think about
He just won’t leave my mind”
Very sad indeed!
You described it well!
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This was amazing.
It was tremendously sad, but it was so well crafted that it makes the sadness worse.
It's got a nice rhythm that could almost be imagined to music. Ever thought of putting your stuff to music?
Anyway, I'm sorry this happened, but then again, if it hadn't, would this work of art have been created?
Take care
Nikki
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sad
this is heartbreaking
and you will find love again as long as youre not bitter about it from the first time round
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its an amazing poem...im sorry u have to go thru so much pain to create it tho....
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