dear god, cant you see im on the road to ruin?
so please just kill me now, i dont care how you wanna do it.
i try so hard for love and all im getting is rejection,
sitting in the bathroom with my shadow and reflection,
close the curtains, dim the lights, and hide inside my mind,
all i wanna do right now is motherfuckin die!
stab me, shoot me, drown me, choke me,
burn me, cut me, overdose me,
raise me high and drop me down,
anything just kill me now,
break my bones, make me cry,
cut off all my air supply,
pull my hair, make me bleed,
nobody will hear me scream,
slice me, strangle or sedate me,
i know you already hate me
dear god, why wont you grant my only wish and strike me down?
my mind is workin overtime to figure this shit out.
take me to the borderline and push me off the edge,
watch me hyperventilate and laugh until im dead,
watch my life disintegrate and chill me to the bone.
dear god, i try so hard for love but still end up alone.
scratch me, gouge me, carve me, bite me,
anybody wanna fight me?
you know im not afraid to die,
stick a needle in my eye,
twist my strings till im in tune,
rub the salt in all my wounds,
chew me up and spit me out,
anything just kill me now,
rip my heart out, sacrifice me,
poison me or paralyze me,
hit me, beat me, gas me, crush me,
cuz i know youll never love me
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A contest entry
- A bit of a change for Dani. by November-Dani.
550 points, ended November 29, 2008, 9 entries
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Nice write. I must admit I have felt like this before. Keep on writing.
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Wow, this piece is truly incredible, I can relate.
The way you worked this, well I love it, it's truly amazing.
I don't have anything bad to say.
Great write!
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thank you =]
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Death is a very final thing, you should know for certain that you really want it first. I have felt this way before too.
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i know
thats why i do this..if i get my feelings out in writing i dont have to act on them
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Love it!
Hmm, I have hard time finding poems I truely like but this has got to be one of them. I love the hmm... desperation? It's something that I can definately relate to haha.
Good job and sorry my comment isn't very useful.
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Love the second and fourth prhases. I think it lacked enough story for this contest, though I love it just the same. Well done. Thanks for entering.
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Wow!
This is AMAZING! I can relate to this poem so much. I love this so much and the rhyming is so perfect; it seems effortless. Wow!
xx
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meant to give you these well deserved clappy things
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sensational
i love this it has a rhythm that rants its way through the anguish it is a very powerfull write, love the line twist my strings till im in tune, rub the salt in all my wounds nice write thanks for sharing littlefishone
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