Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Absorption ( HM )

Embellished dreams,

crystallised in the sanctuary of mind.

Immunity from painful solace,

anesthetic droplets transparent,

reflecting one more tear,

ebb upon the tides,

ever turning.

 

Alone, standing,

fearful dread I seek understanding..

 

Touching words,

envelope membranes of a heart,

ever supporting arteries,

oxygenating warmth of air,

breath deeply,

I absorb...

Author notes

Please credit the artist : My lost jewels By Floranda on Deviant art
50 to 70 words only

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 11 of 11

  • MD Masroor
    October 23, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Beautiful analogy! Strong words and vivid imagery made this poem a wonderful read! A great piece of art from a great poet! Good luck in the contest!


  • MysticalRayne
    October 22, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is beautifully done - I loved you analogy on this piece - best of luck in the contest


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 21, 2008
    Edit | Reply

    Awesome honey

    Oh how you enterlace your words and bring the mind to places we only dare to venture .Bravo


  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 20, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Wow this was just breath-taking sis.
    I loved it from beginning to end
    so filled with depth beyond an
    ocean and beautiful thoughts.
    So much meaning and life to your words,
    very brilliantly & cleverly crafted write.

    Amazing work & best of luck hun


  • daviscth silver member
    October 20, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is amazing Julie. It really fits the prompt.
    I love the ending line. It's perfect. Good luck.....


  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    October 20, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    Interesting

    How scientific! Scientific poetry, that is certainly different. But, at the same time very poetic and well written. Great Job! ~Peace~Gar


  • maralisa silver member
    October 20, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    aw wow julie a wondeful poem your words paint some beautiful imagery and yet in the shadows there is a depth of sadness bringing out alsorts of emotions good luck in the contest my friend take care maralisa


  • chilali
    October 19, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Oh wow. This poem is filled with sadness and beauty. I loved the vivid imagery and the flow throughout.

    "Alone, standing,
    fearful dread I seek understanding.."

    I love those lines! Well, what can I say! You've done it once again. Brilliant. Good luck to you in the contest


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    October 19, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    i feel your pain...... hugs...... awesome write... thanks for sharing and writing out your pain good luck in contest...


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 19, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Mum this is a sad & beautiful poem.. the imagery is very strong, and vivid. lines 3 & 4 are the ones that stood out to me... the pain can be felt within each word that you've written.

    good luck Mum

    kat


    p.s. I'm here for you

1 - 11 of 11