It's not the cuts that feel the pain
It's not the spiraling of the vein
It's not the capillaries circling round'
It isn't the sight. It isn't the sound.
It's your response that hurt my heart
Your cold refusal tore me apart
You knew I was in a time of need!
But you don't sacrifice
You let me bleed.
A contest entry
- Hatred at it's best. by Rejected Easter Egg.
1080 points, ended October 25, 2008, 39 entries
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Comments
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Nice poem, but a bit too long sorry.
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Ouch. -wince- I feel this poem very strongly...
Well done.
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Nice flow here and good word choice. I'm not much for sad stuff, but you did this very effectively and I liked it.
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Sad
Good clean writing. I like the composition and the word choice is perfect as it lets the story and the feelings come right through.
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