sightless
of your deceit
jealousy controlled fate
with six feet of earth now planting
those lies
Author notes
Cinquain Form 2,4,6,8,2
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXVIII - by Bear - by Arkbear.
825 points, ended October 22, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Briliant!
Love this! Definitely 
of Gold! Wonderful choice of words. Great imagery! 
So much said in a wonderful form. Nice work. 
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heavy
missed this one great job
congrats
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Thankyou for the congrats and for the kind comment
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Best entry so far....I still have a few to go..........aesthetics are sloping a tad on the sides.......but message is tha Bomb!
Lovin your Title....really like your talent and insight.......I hope I see more of your work in my contests.....good luck & God bless,
Bear ~
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I am very honored to hear your praise and to be awarded my first gold trophy (only trophy)since I joined.
I enjoy writing form poetry and appreciate the comment and courtesy of your critique.
Is there anything else you could offer in assisting my aesthetics?
This was a true pleasure to enter and to come across so many talented writers and contest host.
Thankyou!!!
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Hello Lacey.....so pleased to have awarded yopu your first Trophy........and GOLD!
I remember my first, it was a Gold as well.....I was hooked after that!
You did an excellent job my Dear with this Cinquain.....I hope to see you join me again for a different Form.....God bless you,
Bear ~
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Wow, loved the end lines...
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Thankyou
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