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Home
quaint bleached
wood shelter
stands wintered, humble –
sentinel,
resolute.
Orange stands
beside, quivers as headdress.
Plow
Farmer’s
fortitude tips hat,
flattens straw plains
into careening
brown ripped muscle,
ox plod, vee-ed iron
toil clank and
lathered leather.
Remorse is
permanently planted.
Hearth
Kettled ducks over
pot belly ,
cabbage cross dressed
in careful congregation;
meaty turnips,
squashed tasty tubers
at height of potency’s
quickened sate.
Thanksgiving plains.
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Author notes
revised - 11/2/08
(Use of the "Thanksgiving plains" spelling is a a deliberate double play on the word plain/plains - as in ordinary/midwest landscape) General: This is a couple of vignettes of a Mid-West Plains settler around Thanksgiving time.
Bank words used:
Cabbage
Careen
Careful
Farmer
Fortitude
Haunting
Heighten
Quaint
Quickening
Remorse
Ripple
A contest entry
- Word Bank Anyone? by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended November 6, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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... toil clank and lathered leather...
I like this use of language.
Good use of the word bank in this interesting presentation. I wanted to read Thanksgiving Plans at then end.
There are many tidbits in this piece that lead to near understanding. Yet, I find myself in a list of fragmented thought. Could just be me, but will give this a second read before the contest close.
Thank you for your entry and best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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superb writing. I love the way you
took the simple words in the bank,
dressed them up, and then...(how
did you do this??) produced a simple
but oh-so-beautiful poem. My only
suggestion: darken the font so that
the words don't get lost in the pattern
of the background...
I love this poem.
Lane
xxoo
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How did I do this? Well what I do first is mull over the list of words. This particular word bank had words in groups of three and we were to use at least 2 of the 3 words in each group in our poem. I looked over the words and then noticed the common characteristics in each word. ( i.e.: Farmer, Cabbage and Quaint) I asked which words seem to be related. Then, being a visual person, I started to visualize a scene in my head allowing my muse full reign to come up with thoughts from the serious to the ridiculous. Then, after I formed the nucleus of the idea, I chose other words to fit in and around the bouquet.
(uh...Lane, the words are as dark as they go - that's black, but you already knew that you nut)
kiss kiss hug hug
Paul -
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....use BOLD font
gee whiz....
talk to you later, gater
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You have a gold membership. Doing things like that is easier for you.
You said change the COLOR of the font. You didn't say make it BOLD
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Yes! Such a living poem...alive with descriptive imagery....Wonderful!
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Thank you Rose Angel.
Paul
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I agree, this is a very richly layered poem. Loved the end.
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Thank you K. Okay so maybe cabbage and duck don't go together - that's my poetic cooking license. lol
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I love this..how it comes all together in the ending of Thanksgiving plains...this is beautiful, Paul, wonderful images..I love how this moves the reader from home to plow to hearth..and an excellent title
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Thank you Tara for reading and commenting.
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You packed a lot of images into this one...and allowed me a look into a different way of living. Lovely use of the senses here too.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you Nicolette. I enjoy simplicity.
Paul
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Yummmmmmmmm....
Loved the 'Hearth' and the end line...
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Thank you Patsy. Simple elements of a plains settler is what I was going for here.
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