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Unsure(?)

I wish that I could crack these ribs,
And reach inside.

Maybe pull out what's eating me apart.










Then that way I could
Deteriorate myself to the bones
All on my own.

[Create a piece of art(?)]


I'm falling apart,
  And I'm reaching for your hands,
But I don't know where they went.


I'm sorry I can't reach up to your standards,
I really am. 
But if I was any taller, I'd be giant,
And my height is the one thing that you said you'd change about me...



Nothing is perfect,
So I guess I'm a nothing,




(Since other than my height;


You said I was perfect.)

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I hate this tension between us.
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  • She Stole My Voice
    October 19, 2008
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    "I wish that I could crack these ribs,
    And reach inside.

    Maybe pull out what's eating me apart."

    Oh Shannon.
    There's no reason why you should feel this way;
    and if there is,
    I'll kill it.
    Seriously.


    I fucking love you to Pluto and back 6976797132549674353 times.


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    October 19, 2008
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    Wow; I love this poem. It captured some of my feelings that I just can't get out. Sigh. I hate this as well.

    "I'm falling apart,
    And I'm reaching for your hands,
    But I don't know where they went."

    My favorite lines.. Oh how I can relate. I hope things get better. <3