The ripple of life shelters the remorse,
as a spiral of heightening values.
So rigid at first,
but quickening
and losing
structure.
Becomes qualified, to represent a ghost.
To horrify those haunting him at night,
as they walk the day alive.
Quaint, little lives
that tear him
out of fear.
The farmer built
on fortitude,
careful to lay his fortune on chance.
His gamble is on the fountain of rain,
falling on his soils,
soaked by the cabbage.
Life is a balance
of care,
to know that fragile
beings, rely
on the bounds others take
for granted.
Author notes
i used all but one word from the word bank. here is a list of the words i used
Cabbage
Careful
Farmer
Fortitude
Fountain
Haunting
Heighten
Horrify
Quaint
Qualified
Quickening
Remorse
Rigid
Ripple
A contest entry
- Word Bank Anyone? by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended November 6, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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These are interesting stanzas that float down the page like water ripples. You have used the word bank quite well to produce this beauty.
Most enjoyable. Thank you for a splendid entry and best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Please take a moment to reference the words used from the word bank in your author's notes.
I will be back. ~Pamela -
Very good write. Deep in a way that eludes understanding. It was beautiful and sad. I really loved the second stanza it stood out to me the most. I am usually a very blunt critic but this gave me nothing to want to correct or say bad about. Great write and keep it up. Thank you for sharing,
stephanie
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thank you very much for letting me know.
the second stanza was my favourite too lol, it had a difference to normality
jezz
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Oh God! I totally forgot, had bookmarked this contest! Very well done poet! I suddenly remembered the words Quaint and Cabbage!
You know what? the last verse is my thoughts, I often say that. Maybe I have said it somewhere, but differently. Great job with this one! I truly loved the way you have done this whole write, very nice!
Love and light.
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ahh well good thing there is still some time left.
i agree with ya entirely with the last verse, its like a proverb or a well known idea.
im really glad you enjoyed
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