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I’m not to keen on water
it gets right up my nose
Though I do so like the feeling
when it trickles through my toes
Mum say that I ought like it
like a proper pachyderm
I tried it once but found it made
my trunk look like a worm
Dad says that I am silly
my hooter looks just right
If it was any longer
it wouldn’t suit my height
I wish that it was longer
not just halfway to the floor
While walking in the long grass
I need it to explore
That’s the reason I am sitting
beneath this waterfall
I’m hoping that the overflow
will make my body small
So everything looks perfect
and folk will say I’m sweet
With my little trunk a dangly
down level with my feet
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Author notes
option 7
A contest entry
- Humour in Nature - Contest Two by AnnD.
1000 points, ended November 3, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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congratulations well deserved....
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Hearty congratulations for your trophy dear Legend - well deserved. Von
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absolutely wonderful. I loved this and i howled with laughter reading it..
It is such an amazing image it certainly lends itself to a wonderful poem as you have written. Well done. I love it.
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You gave me a smile with this extremely pleasurable read. A cute picture and well worded, I'm sure with what I have read so far judging will be tough so many inspired poems.
All the best your a Legend.
Cyber (Paul)
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what a delightful poem...you truly tickled our muses!
That was such and enjoyable pleasure to read!
the rhyming was flawless and shows your clever wit!
loved it!
ears/Seattle
way to make our hearts and trunks laugh!
(i'm irish..i have one of those too..don't tell anybody!)
lol
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Thank you Ears(and trunk) my you make it sound like this piece is about you.
Thank you so much for you comments they are more than appreciated Thank you
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Cute write !
This is such a delightful poem It suits the chosen prompt so well. Best of luck in this contest 
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Thank you Julie it is always a pleasure to get another poets reactions to one work Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment
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I’m sitting under water, as you can see I’m wet
Would you like to join me, it’s fabulous you bet,
Where else could a baby elephant have so much lovely fun
With Dad close by to watch me then dried off by my Mum.
A grand take on the picture
A feature for a ‘book’
So kids in the near future
Can also take a look!
~Von xx
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Dear Von your comments thrill me
always so full of fun
One day the're going to kill me
so take it easy hun
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Superb plus
What a coool, fun little write. It reminds me, somewhat, of Dr Suess' stories. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing. -
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Dr Suess Mmm a favourite of mine First found him when my youngest daughter broke her leg 20yrs ago I used to read her Green Eggs and Ham every night in hospital Thank you for your most welcome comments
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It was my pleasure. I always enjoy reading your poetry.
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An excellent write and fits the pic perfectly. Loved it!! Wonderfully done. Best of luck!
Linda
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Thank you Linda so pleased that you found it an enjoyable read Thank you for doing so
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This is just perfect in every way. I love the way you gave 'Little Ellie' a voice and such a sweet voice at that. The poem and the picture compliment each other wonderfully.
All the best in the contest
Sue
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Thank you Sue the image just asked for a voice and a cheeky one at that I do so enjoy this type of contest where one can just write and enjoy having fun doing it Thank you for your comments
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This is awsome. I really love it. Nice Work
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Thank you panic-tiger so pleased that you found this little bit of nonsense enjoyable Thank you for reading and commenting
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Lovely humour as always Legend lol. I've not been around as much these days, but it's wonderful to pop over and read your funny, sweet poems....they always put a smile on my face. Thank you for sharing this lovely write and all the best in the contest.
Shaz xx
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Thank you Shaz for dropping by you know you always have a welcome in this poet world You have been missed as of late hope things are well with you and the pen will be put to good use soon
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Such a delightful rhyme. I just loved this. So perfect with the image.
....down level with my feet....
I just had to chuckle. Excellent. ~Pamela
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Thank you Pam it always nice to know one can entertain the reader,that is why your comments mean so much Thank you
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You did this picture well
lol and still laughing. this was so sweet...mac
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Thank you Mac pleased you enjoyed this one
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This is really cute. Love the humor and rhythm as always.
Few spelling errors (I think)
4th line: Is it supposed to be "though"
12th line: "height"
14th "halfway" is one word
15th and 16th "I's" are lowercase"
Uch I feel like an English teacher here with the corrections, but I figure you'd prefer to fix them then to simply leave them.
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Thank you for your comments and for pointing out my errors as i have said before i always manage a couple each poem I really do appreciate when readers point them out Thank you
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l.o.l.
very amusing! perfect for the pic. yeah there's something to that logic huh? l.o.l. shrinkage..oohh scary!! l.o.l.
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Thank you my dear friend Its nice to get contests like these to imspire the mind to write
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Another one
for the book for children I would say!
It is a nice little ditty for kids to read my friend.
Please re-consider, talk to your girls.
Jim
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Thank you Jim for your continued support and your continual pressure to do the book (no way)
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