I close my eyes and all I see is dark
I never see a picture in my mind
Some others see a walk across the park
Or something lost they truly want to find
I close my eyes and all the pictures cease
But listen to the sounds from all around
The chattering that occupies the peace
The sounds of all the things I've ever found
I close my eyes to shut out all I see
For then my world is all that I can hear
Is this really only true for me?
Do others see another world that's clear?
I close my eyes and live another life
But do not miss the sights you people know
My daydreams fill with happiness and strife
But never with a moving picture show
I close my eyes and live inside my dream
I know the way the things I dream must look
It's not as odd as maybe it may seem
I see my life like reading from a book
So I can't write about the things I see
Your prompt is not the way things are for me
A contest entry
- Close your eyes and tell me what you see by Meroza.
1100 points, ended November 8, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on the honerable mention, Well desurved, Keep writting.
your work is alwas so great.
~ Chelsey ♥ -
I really like the way you have done this because you were honest. It must have been difficult to write about seeing nothing, but you did it so well and really made a very unique poem about of seeing nothing but, hearing everything.
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Another beauty.
Indeed when I close my eyes
I head to a private hideaway
that I only see. My dream, my love, me.
Thats all. Until the alarm sounds and
reality kicks me in gear.
well penned as always
Bes of luck
Love you
Tory
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i don't know if i believe this...i imagine that when you close your eyes you see a world so magical even the flowers blush when you walk by.
Love, Lane
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This is great! I couldn't see anything either... you turned that nothing into something really amazing! Great idea for the poem. Good luck in the contest!
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Oh this takes me to my early art school days when we were told to close our eyes and paint what we see, I couldn't do it either. So did shades of black in different media. Awesoe penning
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Your poem had a great flow and made it such a joy reading it, and I can understand that some may not be able to see anything whiles other see so much.
All in all I felt a connection with your words and I liked what you said, explaining why you couldn't see a simple idea.
Thank you for taking the time to enter and best of luck
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